I love your story about the lonely rose. You describe so perfectly how she had formed her friendship with her previous owner and how she felt once that little girl left. I think the story perhaps ended a little abruptly. Most readers are ok with a little bit of sadness and perhaps you could have described the Lonely Rose deteriorating for the winter etc and then maybe meeting her new owner. I just thought maybe you could have added a little more before the conclusion. I love the idea of this story. It reminds me a little bit of 'The Walking Tree' poem you did last year.
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